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What Exactly Is Your Problem?


Shaylene could not recall the exact date it happened.  The only thing that stood out clearly in the fog that now swirled about her was the last thing her supervisor had said. 

"What exactly is your problem?"

It was at that moment that Shaylene lost it.  The zillion bits of knowledge, thoughts, memories  and emotions that had been crammed into her brain for the last forty years surpassed maximum capacity and her head exploded in all directions like a Technicolor rainbow.

Shaylene soon discovered that she liked her life a lot better after the "cerebral accident", as the doctors referred to it; the soft swirls of light, sound, and color were a perfect match for her watercolor thoughts and dreams.
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I'm linking up with awesome Ivy Walker at "Uncharted" for Six Sentence Stories
The cue this week is "EXACT"
Come and read what others have written and share a story of your own!

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    1. Thanks Gail! Sometimes I feel like my head might just do that!

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  2. ayiiee!

    no, seriously, I like the story but, for me, it's totally horrifying/scary…. made me think of a character in an old (and somewhat famous) short story, 'It's a Good Life' by Jerome Bixby. And, now that I think of it, my association of your story and 'It's a Good Life' is not about the story itself, as much as one of the characters in the story… I think it was the boy's mother or aunt.
    (Have I wandered away? lol no! really! there is a connection!)

    Good Six, seeing how much it's got me thinking about stories and such

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    1. Now I had to go check out what "It's A Good Life" is about, and that is indeed a scary concept, Clark! I do see a connection about what can happen within the confines of our minds!

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  3. I can see that being a far happier life, though what kind of day-to-day existence she'd be living...possibly not so wonderful. Great characterisation.

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    1. I agree Lizzy, the concept sounds wonderful, but the reality probably wouldn't be as pretty.

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  4. Wow. Great story, Josie. That photo is inspirational. Which came first, the photo or the story? Watercolor thoughts and dreams is a wonderfully visual line.

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    1. Thanks Val! This was a fun write. As usual, I had a concept in mind, then found the perfect illustration on Google which helped me flesh out the story. I totally loved that picture, I didn't want anything too dark or gory.

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  5. I love the story - and the photo is perfect!

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    1. Thanks, Lisa! This was one of those times that they story almost wrote itself once I found the perfect illustration for my concept.

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  6. That last line is fabulous! I, like clark find the idea terrifying.... But wow...you put it soooo well! Great writing!

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    1. Thanks, Ivy! I wanted to use the watercolor effect as a way to describe something with soft edges and pastel colors. I have thought more than once that if one more person had some bit of information or drama that needed to make its way into my head, it was going to result in a very messy explosion. This story is born of that idea.

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  7. Watercolor thoughts and dreams....nice! Have a special weekend.

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    1. Thank you Linda, sometimes I would like a nice mellow, quiet life with soft edges. I have that on Saturday mornings to some effect when I don't turn on the TV or music and don't put in my hearing aids! :-)

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  8. Sometimes it's a wonder more of us don't have that happen to us.

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    1. I agree, Mimi, there are times when I feel very close to the blowing point! Perhaps that indicates I have a bit too much tension in my life at work! LOL

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  9. I liked your story but it was scary. I sometimes find myself worried about having a "cerebral accident". I know it is silly to worry about something that may not or probably won't happen but I do, not often but sometimes. If it resulted in watercolor thoughts and dreams I could adjust and be happy.

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    1. I know what you mean, Patricia, thoughts like that sometimes take up my mind too as I get older, what if I become mentally or physically incapacitated and unable to conduct my life in the manner I do now... very scary thought!

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  10. I feel that this could happen to myself at any moment. I'd like to think that I have watercolour thoughts and dreams that daily life just interrupts. :)

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    1. This highly combustible state is a familiar feeling to me as well! I like your concept that maybe our thoughts and dreams are watercolor and they just get muddied up by the stuff of daily life!

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