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After Midnight


It was midnight and the bar would be closing in another two hours. She never knew what to expect once his band gig ended, if he would come home drugged up, drunk, or not at all. Sometimes he didn't wander in until late the next morning, always with some lame excuse. She was tired of being neglected, tired of weeks and years of her life passing while she waited for him to grow up and get his act together.  She looked around the now empty rooms one more time, tossed her key on the table and walked out, knowing this time when he came home she wouldn't be waiting.  

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I'm linking up with Lillie McFerrin for Five Sentence Fiction
where the writing prompt this week is "midnight" 
 

And with Brenda at Pondering With A Purpose
where this week's prompt is "time flies"

 

30 comments:

  1. Josie....what a great little piece of writing! I might need to get in on this five sentences of fiction...

    Thanks for pondering with me!

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    1. I've discovered that Five Sentence Fiction is great brain exercise, Brenda... they can be written quickly and it helps me learn to be a bit less verbose. ;-) Definitely, you should give it a try, it's fun!

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  2. Such a sad little story in so few sentences. Well done!

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    1. It pretty much tells us all we need to know, doesn't it Dan? Most of us could probably fill in any blanks between the lines. Thanks for stopping by!

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  3. Good for her! It's about time she left. Nicely told.

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  4. As a been there done that musicians wife (my first two childrens father) I can identify! Great write and combination of the prompts :)

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    1. I've been there too Len, only I stayed about ten years longer than I should have. Older and wiser now! :-) Thanks for dropping by!

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  5. A nice strong scene - and good for her!

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    1. Thank you Sif! I agree, she needed to find a happier place in life.

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  6. Good for her Josie. She deserves better! Glad she left.

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    1. I agree Robin, it wasn't about him doing band gigs, it was about the way he treated her and that he didn't make time for her in his life. A spouse who doesn't come home is one who is not committed to the relationship.

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  7. Sometimes the problem is having too many expectations from our mate. If she would have gone on, living her life… without spending too much emotion on waiting for him to get home after the gig… they may have lived together more happily…

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    1. I think it's true Shimon that we cannot expect a mate to meet all our needs and be with us all the time, that is not healthy or fair. But in this case he was not respectful in sometimes not even coming home, and often coming home in a condition which made for an unhealthy and unsafe relationship... substance abuse leads to spouse abuse. She could have lived her own life and let him go on living as he did, but if he never made her a priority in his life, was was the point of remaining with him? What did he bring to the relationship of value? Sometimes there are other good things that are shared, sometimes it becomes two separate lives living under one roof, not really sharing or supporting each other. Then they would do better on their own or with someone else.

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  8. She made her escape.
    Good.
    Cheers!
    JzB

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    1. Indeed she did JzB, and she lived happily ever after :-)

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  9. I love it when a girl gets her act together. Nice one.

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    1. Me too Sandra, it was time for her to stop playing the victim and initiate change in her life!

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  10. Hard yet triumphant. A strong, insightful piece.

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    1. Thank you Angela! It's been hard for her, and it's going to be harder as she makes the transition, but then life will look a whole lot better!

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  11. Wow...story depicting so much of frustation and a never ending wait ..

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    1. So true Sadia, so much more to what isn't goin right in this relationship, waiting was just a small part of her frustration, and deep down she knew by now the waiting for things to change was pointless.

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  12. Nice job. Perhaps her mate will finally realize what he took for granted and thereby lost.

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    1. Funny how they so often do Jayne, realize what they lost, too late. "You don't know what you've got 'til it's gone." Strangely, they also tend to repeat the same mistake over with the next person who gives them a chance at love!

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  13. Glad she's not waiting any longer!

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    1. Me too, Lisa! Sometimes one can spend a lifetime waiting for their partner to grow up!

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  14. You go, girl.... don't put up with it anymore. LOve it. You are really good at these flash fictions, Josie!!!

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    1. Amen Selma, run girl run and don't look back! You should join us at FSF Selma, I remember some of your awesome short stories!

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