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Almost Perfect


Everyone at the community center agreed that Sam, with his friendly smile, round belly, and long white beard, was the perfect candidate to play Santa for the children's party this year.  Sam loved the idea, and put on the performance of a lifetime as he fulfilled his role with the obligatory ho-ho-ho's and and a fair amount of asking children if they'd been good.  In fact Sam was having such a good time that he volunteered to play Santa at the mall, and the townsquare, and the Boys & Girls Club too.  He even took to dressing up like Santa at home, sitting out on his front porch in his rocking chair, offering cocoa and cookies to children who ventured up the sidewalk through the snowdrifts to say hello. Everyone in the community was delighted at how playing Santa had brought out the best in Sam, who for most of his life had been quiet and reclusive... that is until the day that five-year-old Jamie went missing.
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I'm linking up with Lillie McFerrin for Five Sentence Fiction
where the writing prompt this week is "candidate".

20 comments:

  1. Ya suckered me in and then slapped me at the end.

    Very well done.

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    1. Thank You Monkey, I love a little story that packs a subtle punch! ;-)

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  2. This is a good 5 sentence story Josie. But now I want to know what happens...so ya left me hanging! (:>)

    I again want to thank you so much for your loving words of encouragement to me. I guess I do need some time away...and will probably return to blog again! I think we are leaving tomorrow.

    Have a good week!

    Linda

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    1. So I did, Linda! ;-) The story leaves us wondering if this sweet santa could really be a bad guy in disguise, a sadly common theme in today's world.

      I'm delighted you are going away together this week, have a wonderful time and tell us all about it when you return!

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  3. Woah...it was all cookies and cozy until the very creepy end. Interesting concept! Yikes!

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    1. Hehehe, Carrie, a rather dark twist I know! On a deeper level this story is about trusting people, and that things are not always what they seem. There has been so much in the news in recent years about trusted adults harming children. Sadly, we need to always be cautious.

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  4. So... is there a five sentence sequel?..... :)

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    1. If there was, it is possible we wouldn't like it very much, Louise. What I do like about this story is that the ending is left open... while it could be the intro to a horrific tale, it could also be a story of mis-judgement and redemption. Sometimes we are quick to jump to the obvious conclusions, which are not always true.

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  5. Yeah, I figured it would be that kind of ending. Maybe reading the dark twists in the other FSF entries set me up, or maybe I'm just a cynic.

    Two bad for Jaimie.

    JzB

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    1. I think the fun of writing very short stories is throwing a kink in the works JzB, so yes it is somewhat to be expected. I am often cynical also when things seem to be too good to be true.

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  6. Wow!!! You do it well...the twist at the end. I didn't see it coming.

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    1. Thanks Gail! I love a story with a twist that changes your whole perception of what you just read.

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  7. Has he been set up, I wonder? Or is he the child killer we're meant to think he is?
    Gah! Very well done :)

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    1. Bravo Mark! Most folks are quick to jump to the obvious assumption, and just maybe they're wrong! Isn't that so true of life in general?

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  8. I'm with Mark...that was really well put across and I'm hoping Jamie turns up!

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    1. I hope so too Lisa, things are not always as they seem!

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  9. What can I say, being about the last to comment--all has been said. great post.

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    1. I think they've got it pretty well covered! But I really appreciate you stopping by to read! :-)

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