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Darcie's Longing


Darcie knew she was taking a big risk when she slipped unnoticed into her mother's room and removed the violin from its case on the shelf.  If her father caught her she would be punished severely.  Running from the city walls, she stopped on the stone bench near the grove of trees where her mother used to take her as a child.  Darcie's mother had disappeared one day; the townsfolk said she had run off with the horseman, a handsome young man who was known to charm the ladies. Darcie's father had forbidden her to ever play the violin again, since it was her mother who had taught her.  But music was the only connection she still had to her mother, and Darcie somehow believed that if she played the violin the music would draw her mother home.

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I'm linking up with Sunday Scribblings where the prompt this week is "risk".


22 comments:

  1. What a beautiful and poignant story. That looks like the Notre Dame in Paris in the distance!

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    1. Thank you Old Egg! I beleive that you are right! The story was inspired by the picture, which I loved.

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  2. An excellent story that does indeed answer the prompt.

    I may just have to tackle that prompt in my own Monkey way.

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    1. Thank you Monkey! Just a short piece of flash fiction, I'm finding them a great deal of fun. You should indeed participate, gets the creative juices flowing and your take would surely be unique. Hoping you will join us for Two Shoes Tuesday this week too! :-)

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  3. I loved the emotions in this piece ... well written !!!

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    1. Thank you Green Speck! In this case Darcie's belief that she could somehow draw he mother home overcame her fear of the risk should her father discover her.

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  4. This is a little doorway into a big story... loved it :-).

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    1. Thank you Alice! I realized after I had written it that it does indeed have the potential to be an intro to an expanded tale, it leaves many questions unanswered and possibilties abound!

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  5. What a story! Poor Darcie, I hope there is more to come of this!

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    1. Perhaps I will work on expanding Darcie's story, I think we all want life to end up much more happily for her than it appears to be at the moment.

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  6. A really touching piece. Short but very sweet.

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    1. Thank you Keith! Just a moment of flash fiction inspired by the picture, thinking about what might be going on.

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  7. distilled.....gloriously so
    :)

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    1. Thanks MMP, I'm having fun playing with brevity these days, a far cry from my usual rambling tales. :-)

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  8. Beautiful..the match between image and word..as crystallised as the look on her face..the strength..defiance..and determination..jae

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    1. Thank you Jae! You read her face exactly as I did, strength of character. I have little doubt she will find her mother, one way or another, despite her father's determination to prevent it.

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    1. Thank you McGuffy Ann! I would so love to have this portrait in my home. I need to research and find out who the artist is!

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  10. Loved the way you expanded on the picture to fit the prompt! I would like to read more of Darcie's story!

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    1. When I saw "Darcie's" face in this painting, Abigail, I just knew she was the kind of girl who would take a risk for something that was very important to her, she has a look of defiance, tempered by sadness. Perhaps I will need to write of where Darcie's life takes her from this point. :-)

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