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Blue Sweater Blues


Today, for the first time, I'm joining Lillie McFerrin for Five Sentence Fiction where the prompt this week is "awkward", and the task is to write a compelling story in just five sentences.  Here is mine....


Brenda was thoroughly enjoying her new friendship with her coworker Pam, exchanging tidbits of their lives and slowly getting to know one another.  

Home from an exciting Friday night encounter with a new guy she'd met at the local tavern, she rushed to her computer to share all the details in an email to Pam. 

"He is sooo handsome", Brenda wrote, "he was wearing this blue sweater that matched his eyes perfectly, and before long we were kissing and cuddling in a dark corner of the bar."  

"Then we came back to my apartment for a nightcap, and well... one thing led to another and the sex was amazing, I can't get the scent of his Black Forrest cologne off my mind."

Pam, weary from yet another night of staying up waiting for her husband to return home from working late, read Brenda's email early the next morning, shortly after picking up Frank's blue sweater from the bedroom floor where he'd left it in a heap with the rest of his clothes, all smelling like a mixture of his favorite Black Forrest and something else she couldn't quite put her finger on.

33 comments:

  1. Deliciously naughty! I really enjoyed reading this!

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    1. Thank you Andrew, it was fun to write! :-)

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  2. So glad you decided to take part, this was brilliant-totally awkward moment!!!!

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    1. I'm really glad I found FSF too, Laura, some great writing going on there... inspiring! Yes, I think this is the ultimate akward moment, and about to become explosive.

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  3. Well, Mrs. Two Shoes, you did it again. Excellent story about a very awkward moment. Where do you come up with this stuff?

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    1. Thank you Annie, I am humbled by your ongoing encouragement. I'm afraid my mind likes to play in the mud, I was considering awkward situations and this one took the prize. Imagine having to address this with a new friend or coworker, ouch!!

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  4. OH~Ho the mouse is about to be caught by the cat, interesting.....

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    1. Yes Len, I believe the mouse's ruse of "working late" has just been thrown into the clear light of day, and he will be lucky if he lives to tell the tale!

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    1. Yes indeed Wayne, what a horrible situation to find oneself in, not only has she learned that she can't trust her husband, he has just cost her a much-needed friendship as well. I found myself hoping the two new friends could somehow work thru it together, if possible.

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  6. ohhhh, that's bad.
    and I want to know as well...where do you come up with this stuff?

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    1. Very bad indeed, Robin. I am glad the rat is caught! But I wish it hadn't been her friend who uncovered his betrayal. I have lived long and much Robin, the things I write are of real life situations, and this one, at least the betrayal part, is sadly all too common. Little thought is given to who or how many will be hurt.

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    1. Thank you, Shimon! A very common story with a little twist!

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  8. Uh oh! I wonder if Pam put two and two together...
    Nice one!

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    1. Let's hope she wasn't so unwilling to see what she must have already suspected that she overlooks the obvious. Sometimes that happens. Glad you liked it!

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  9. Oh no, oh god, ahhh - yep, I think that about covers it ;). I'm cringing for her!

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    1. It is one of those all too familiar nightmares, Sarah, the moment when reality dawns. I cringe for her too.

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    1. Bad Josie, bad girl! ;-) But seriously, Josie is glad the louse has been caught, she is just sad for the harm it will do to the friendship, where neither party was to blame.

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  11. Very good! I suspect she won't, but she should give him hell!

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    1. So often women like this know, Lisa, they just don't want to be confronted with the proof. Maybe now she will feel compelled to stand up and say "it stops or I leave". I hope so!

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  12. Oh yeah, that's awkward for sure! Is it bad that I feel the worst for Brenda? Sharing her excitement for a new-found infatuation, with no inkling that she's infatuated with a lying louse, or that her news is going to bring such pain to her new friend. Sad all around.

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    1. I understand what you're saying, Cheri, here she is all excited about her wonderful encounter with someone new, having no idea that her revelation is going to cause all hell to break loose on the other end, and she may well lose her new friend in the process, through no fault of her own. Life is often so complicated, just like this!

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  13. A wonderful tale.
    I look forward to more of your Five Sentence Fiction.
    PS Where can I get some Black Forrest cologne?!

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    1. Thank you MJS! I can't wait to try my hand at more. Brevity has never been my strong suit, so this is great practice! Sorry to say that Black Forrest is a "designer fragrance" not available for mass market, since for this tale it had to be something no just anyone might wear.;-)

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  14. Ack! Frank had better hope that Pam never manages to identify that other scent! Very nicely done, and I'm so glad you decided to participate. I look forward to reading more of your Five Sentence Fiction!

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    1. Thank you Kern! I think Frank is deep trouble, depending on how forgiving his wife is I suppose. :-)

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    1. Thanks Kate! One of those little life stories we don't ever want to find ourselves involved in!

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  16. Oh my! Wickedly good :) Thank you so much for joining in on Five Sentence Fiction. I look forward to reading more of your writing!!!

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    1. Thank you for the awesome opportunity for me to practice brevity! I love Five Sentence Fiction and I'm happy I found it, you have a bunch of great writers there!

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    2. It really is a wonderful group of writers :)

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