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Today's writing prompt for Sunday Scribblings is "limitless".  Here's my story...

It had gone on for years.  Everyone was amazed by Sue's limitless ability to forgive.  She'd forgiven him time after time for the unfaithfulness, the lies, the jobs lost, the nights spent alone wondering and worrying, the outbursts, the missing money that he never could explain. They all knew.  They all wondered why she put up with it.  She never talked bad of him, never shared what was really going on in her life.  On the surface it appeared that it just didn't matter, or that she'd found some way to block all the disappointment and pain.

One morning early, the people in her town living vicariously through reports on their police scanners, were startled to hear that Joe had been found in his bed with a bullet in his heart... and one in his head for good measure.  Apparently he'd finally crossed the line.

24 comments:

  1. What a silver bullet of a title..and a piece..we all do have limits that's for sure..in a way I commend Sue..although maybe we should seek to shout our limits earlier on..before getting to that line..great write..jae

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    1. I think this was my shortest story ever, Jaerose, but it was fun to write... very therapeutic! Yes indeed it's a shame to let things go that far, destroying two lives in the process.

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  2. Unfortunately, it's undoubtedly more than two lives that get destroyed. There is always fall-out, peripheral people who are affected, hurt, and some are never acknowledged because their pain remains silent.
    Speaking up is best...but not always possible, or not always heard.
    You said a lot, very succinctly.

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    1. That is so true, Annie. We are never totally isolated individuals, there might be children, parents, sisters and brothers, friends, neighbors, coworkers, students, a wealth of people who could be affected by the tragedy of these two lives. It brings to mind how things could have ended so differently if better choices had been made all along the way.

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    2. I think it is very possible that Sue might have addressed these issues with Joe time and time again, to no avail. Until finally she chose the option he could not ignore.

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  3. and there you have it forgiveness is not limitless

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    1. Exactly becca, and I don't believe that it should be, especially when the person committing the offense never repents and never changes their ways.

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  4. Into every woman's life come a time when she descends the staircase, engulfing the house with gasoline as she leaves. Glancing inside at her husband dozing in front of the television, she strikes the match, closes the door, and walks away.

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    1. Ahh yes, I've had moments like that Lotta Joy, or at least contemplated them!

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  5. He should have seen it coming, but of course he didn´t! ;-)

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    1. Yes, Eva, he should have sensed her growing rage. Quiet does not always mean acceptance. Some people feel they can continue on forever and no one will ever stop them. Wrong.

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  6. Devastating short story! If only she had expressed herself earlier - to him and to friends - it might have had a happier ending.

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    1. That's very true, Granny. If things are kept bottled up under pressure, eventually there is going to be a nasty explosion. Even if he wouldn't listen, a real friend might have provided her with ideas of another way out where she could have ended up with the life she dreamed of, as I did. Instead she's sentenced herself to a life of imprisonment and likely greater suffering

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  7. You have created such a wonderful story in so few words allowing the reader to effortlessly fill in all the gaps of the puzzle. Bravo!

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    1. Thank you kindly Oldegg! This was a quick, fun write, and fell together very easily. Maybe that should be cause for concern! LOL As we all know, brevity is not my strong suit, so I was pleased that this time I could deliver without the compulsive need to fill in all the details. Glad you liked it!

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  8. You are cordially invited to join my friends list as I have yours. I have read your comments on several blogs and think you are an interesting person. Would like your views over at my blog. Besides, you like cats. My Sugar lived to be 19 and passed of old age 2 years ago. anyhow, come by for a visit. the rat

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    1. Hello Mohave Rat, welcome to my blog! Any catlover is sure to be a friend of mine! :-) Papa Bear also had a cat "Mama Puss" who lived to be 20 and was devoted to him. I'll definitely be stopping by your blog to pay a visit, thanks for the invitation! :-)

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  9. Short and wonderful loved it you do have a way with words........

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    1. Thank you Jo-Anne! This was born on one of those wicked moments when the mind explores possibilities of the roads not taken. I was thinking about things that are limitless... love is, forgiveness isn't. :-)

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  10. the breaking point that reduces us to the id....

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    1. Absolutely, that point where survival instinct takes over!

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  11. Very short and not so sweet, but it does prove that there are limits to what a woman can take. Leaving would have been better, but this makes a more entertaining read!

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    1. So true Belva! Sometimes the person in this situation cannot see a way out, so they act out of desperation. This had been building for years.

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  12. Sometimes people just snap. We all have our limits and can only take so much. The tension in this was very well expressed. I could feel the emotion. Well done, Josie!

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